I thought this was a very interesting story. You gave a lot of useful information in a short amount of time. Personally, I would've liked to know about the five injured people before knowing the gunman shot himself, but other than that, I really enjoyed the flow of your story.
Brandon, I liked how you highlighted the key points of the story but still informed us of the issue. It is such a terrible situation to be in but you did a great job telling the main events in this shooting without overloading on details. Your story really flowed and your voice was great. I found this story interesting and it is a hot topic being covered.
Brandon, I liked how you highlighted the key points of the story but still informed us of the issue. It is such a terrible situation to be in but you did a great job telling the main events in this shooting without overloading on details. Your story really flowed and your voice was great. I found this story interesting and it is a hot topic being covered.
I thought this was a very interesting story. You gave a lot of useful information in a short amount of time. Personally, I would've liked to know about the five injured people before knowing the gunman shot himself, but other than that, I really enjoyed the flow of your story.
ReplyDeleteI thought the flow of your story was very well, and your voice was clear. I thought your story was very informative. Good job!
ReplyDeleteBrandon, I liked how you highlighted the key points of the story but still informed us of the issue. It is such a terrible situation to be in but you did a great job telling the main events in this shooting without overloading on details. Your story really flowed and your voice was great. I found this story interesting and it is a hot topic being covered.
ReplyDeleteBrandon, I liked how you highlighted the key points of the story but still informed us of the issue. It is such a terrible situation to be in but you did a great job telling the main events in this shooting without overloading on details. Your story really flowed and your voice was great. I found this story interesting and it is a hot topic being covered.
ReplyDeleteThe beginning is really great, and you have a logical middle and end.
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